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│ 106 (PR) You need to travel from your home to a place 40 miles (64 kilometers) away.
│ Compare the different kinds of transportation you could use.
│ Tell which method of travel you would choose. Give specific reasons for your choice.
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│ If I travel about(너무 대화적인 말이네여. approximately가 더 적절합니다.) 64 kilometers distance(킬로미터가 이미 거리기대문에 말할필요 업슷니다.). I can harness two vehicles(methods of transportation). one is my car and another(the other) is a train because train stations are near to my house. Each others disadvantages and superiorities can be emerged.(마지막에 갑자기 이 전꺼랑 열결안되는 말을 하시네여)
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│ Driving my car has disadvantage to tire me. and in my car I can feel rather lonely. train are a little noisy and I cat's fell my own trip. trip on train can go one place though I see via view in train. but the advantages on using train are exist.(이문장은 문법은 제가 안고쳤습니다. 이게 run-on sentence라는 겁니다. 적절한 연결단어 없이 문장들을 붙이 셨네여) this helps to travel in limited time. and I can feel more relax and people things(?) within the same train. and using train are(is) more cheap than using my car.(another run-on sentence. You used the "and" twice in a sentence which is impossible)
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│ but(어느 문장이든 but으로는 시작하지 마세여) I will travel by my car. because the most important thing in traveling are(is) my own time. I can listen to my favorite song in my car even if it is rather loudly(loud). I can decide the road I want to. and then I can rest in free time whenever I want to when feel so tired. this is the my important reason to settle my car in my trip. (run-on sentence)
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│ travel are(is) a valuing(valuable) thing because it gives us special feeling and experiences unknown in boring life(새로운 idea를 말하시네여. conclusion에서는 위에 말한거만 다시 말하면 됩니다.). using my car on a trip can give me my favorite place. my favorite food. and listen, book , view etc and all of this.(이거는 문법적이랑 의미상 틀리네여.) 64kilometers distance(아까 말한거) are(is 이문장에 주어는 단수 취급합니다. 이런거랑 같아여: 10 dollars is not enough to buy fruit) possible that i bear myself preparing and trip because I love trip. (not related to the topic, and awkward)
여기서 가장 중요한 문제점은 2개네여. run-on이랑 awkward네여. 이두개는 다쓰시고 다기 읽으시면 고쳐지는거니까 시도해 보세여. 그래도 왠만하면 2문장 이상 연결하지 말도록 하세여. 너무 기니까 run-on sentence같은 실수를 하시는거 같네여. 도움이 되시길!!